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[Oct. 1st, 2005|01:01 pm]
PLEASE HELP! Read my college essay, and then comment and tell what was good, and what needs improvement!!!

“Do you know who I am?” the gentleman shouted from the other end of the phone. “I’m Gaddi Vasquez, the director of the Peace Corps!”
“Oh, Mr. Vasquez” I replied, “how may I help you?”
“Who are you?” the sharp, impatient, booming voice stated “where is Katie? I like to know everything that goes on when I am away! Who are you?”
“I’m Jessica Begenyi, and I am an intern in the department of communications. Mr. Vasquez, how may I help you?”
And again he shouted “where is Katie?”
“She had an appointment this morning, but she will be back at her desk by 1:00 pm. Again, Mr. Vasquez, what can I do for you?”
“Connect me to Amanda!” he shouts as my shaking finger reaches for the transfer button.
I spend the rest of my morning filling in for the secretary and answering phones. After a chaotic morning, I return to my desk, and eagerly begin working on my project. Earlier in the week I went through the three major recruitment books calculating the percent of each region in each book, and then how that correlates to the number of Peace Corps Volunteers in each region. In addition, it was important to calculate the ethnicities represented to make sure we present an equally diverse group of volunteers. These recruitment tools are seen by every applicant, and need to encourage people of all races, socio-economical status, and ages to join the Peace Corps.
My internship at the Peace Corps Headquarters connects and combines two important things: experience in communications and marketing, and the second, the ability to be creative. The choices I make directly affect the applicants that apply. My job is to represent America with a range of people who want to truly make a difference. This job is also creative because I have to put each piece together to form a much larger picture.
Through my internship, I found out first hand how much difference on individual can make. Here I am, one high school intern, making decisions and helping design a brochure that ultimately may convince many potential volunteers to join the Peace Corps. Specifically, The photographs In the Brochure’s for the current slogan “Life is Calling…How far will you go?” illustrate the love and deep friendships that are made between Volunteers and their new families. When I view these photographs, I feel invigorated about the next years of my life. How will I reach out, and expand my heart? The exact process is unknown, but the fact that it will occur is inevitable. Leaving for the next four years is a lot like joining the Peace corps. Departing for College is answering my life’s calling, and I’m eager to see how far I will go.
As I am putting the final touches on the recruitment books, one of the most important people who works under the director passes by my desk. He says with a good natured laugh “I heard you were baptized this morning”.


[User Picture]From: sixbitsforfact
2005-10-01 05:45 pm (UTC)
It's a cool essay. Are you happy with it?
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[User Picture]From: sixbitsforfact
2005-10-01 10:39 pm (UTC)
if you aren't, maybe make it a little longer. I'm curious to see where it could go if you expanded on some of the ideas.
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[User Picture]From: mshedwig
2005-10-03 01:07 am (UTC)
yeh, it has to be under 500 words...lol, thanks for reading it tho!
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[User Picture]From: htims_mas
2005-10-01 10:53 pm (UTC)
aww blue!
i love your writing!
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[User Picture]From: mshedwig
2005-10-03 01:09 am (UTC)
LOL thats pretty cool. I think the Peace Corps is one of the most amazing things someone can do...i'm DEFFINATLY thinking about it.

<3 Blue (LOL...the blue is for you becca)
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[User Picture]From: ragegremlin
2005-10-03 12:55 am (UTC)
hey remeber me? becca's friend. i liked it but i thought that last line was kind of random. maybe you could explain what he ment. but that's just my personal opinion.
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[User Picture]From: mshedwig
2005-10-03 01:08 am (UTC)
oo thanks! Um, most of my friends didnt get the last line eaither. sigh. So much for my humor. IT is in reference to the director calling me.

this actually happend..and some guy said that to me. If people dont understand it tho, i really shoud clarify it. Thanks SO SO SO much for reading my essay! i really appriciate it!

<3 jessica
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[User Picture]From: zepsgirl16
2005-10-04 10:06 pm (UTC)

Oh my god

Ok, I didn't read ur essay, but I stumbled upon ur name. I just thought I would tell u that "Hedwig..." is mt god/goddess. It's like the best movie ever. Don't u agree?
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[User Picture]From: noedenseve
2005-11-06 03:19 am (UTC)
i like the last line; it can be read as you having your first encounter with the director, or it could also read as a metaphor for the internship, as being a new beginning for you :) but that's just my theory.

what was the essay question that you were supposed to be answering, anyway? most important experience or something?
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